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    It's Comments-Palooza Friday at the Haikulodeon!

     

     


    As per a tradition that I started a year or two ago, This week after Christmas posting has been written by the writers on this site that have contributed haiku comments over the past year.  As you will see, they are an extremely talented bunch and it has been a lot of fun to trade haikus with them.  (I did include in this heap of haikus, one that I wrote just because I had forgotten it and when I was compiling this list, I read it and it made me laugh.)  Thank you to all my fellow haiku writers that have been willing to play with me this past year.  You inspire me and make me want to keep writing.

     


     
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    Love ties together
    what one life can not endure:
    Cruel rodeo.

     moat


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    Money is a game.
    The exchange makes us equal.
    We can both lose all.


    The card on the floor,
    Three doors closed on Sunday night:
    Dreams march toward morning.


    History is tough.
    Stories within all stories.
    But one is not there.

     moat


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    Tall trees say nothing
    living only for sunrise
    Green grass becomes brown


    A Guy Called LULU


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    tanka haiku:

    On the Promenade
    Fog made Manhattan flicker.
    But then the cloud came:

    Its outline barely perceived
    Before wrapping us in gloom.


    moat


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    With each sun rise,
    the dramas of Life resume
    and we step onstage.

    I do not know Smith
    When it rises, there's no stage
    At the least for me

    I find that for me
    The new sun will rise each day
    But for what purpose?

    The dramas of life
    Hold so very little for....
    Oh what is the use?


    Richard Day

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    Dreams are a city,
    Rooms become trains and kisses.
    The space between trees.

    moat

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    Through the train windows,
    I see her on the platform.
    Watch the closing doors.

    Practice teaches us,
    Plus we learn from each other.
    The pleasure is mine.

    moat


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    Riding the Local,
    I saw her on the Express;
    Parallel process.

    When the questions start,
    Everybody gets pissed off.
    It is personal.

    moat


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    Existential snow;
    I shovel, therefore, I am;
    Shape from subtraction.

    moat

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    You love the beloved,
    When all the annoying things,
    Remind you of her.

    moat


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    To properly dance,
    I must first remove my pants;
    Revealing my tights.

    Digging out the car,
    For the seventh time or more,
    I met Sisyphus.

      His boulder is very large.
      He keeps it in a garage.

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    I will take the tour,
    Experience it again,
    Just the way it was.
     
    moat


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    Bulldozers, dump trucks
    They go past my front window
    I'm still a young boy

    Verified Atheist


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    Inadvertent sounds
    let my colleagues know again
    who is day dreaming.

    moat

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    I view CSPAN now
    The fascist ends with GOD BLESS

    Without God or Bless
    Before Teaparties
    Celebrate their wondrous cause

    But I have to pause
    I have to pause because I
    See nothing but lies

    Lies that lie in muck
    Lies that lie in fantasy
    Lies that have no facts

    Nothing is revealed
    Nothing adds to humanity
    Nothing but real hate

    So I leave debate
    I must hold down my hating
    And quit debating


    the end  ... hahaha

    Richard Day
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    Everything we have
    Writ has already been writ
    Every thing writ

    There are so many
    Combinations that can be
    That can be written

    Mathematics are
    The only force to deal with
    Whilst we examine

    Whilst we examine
    The possibilities that
    Do confront us all

    26 letters
    Bind the possibilities
    This even was said

    Richard Day
     

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    tanka haiku:

    It is not a sum,
    a totality of words.
    It is what remains.

         The uncarved block is still there.
         Drops quiver before they fall.


    moat


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    Intended silence
    can shout at the listener.
    No one owns meaning.

    moat


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    tanka haiku:

    Interpretations?
    We each must own them somehow:
    Or own up to them.

         It is less of a rental
         than a condominium.

    --
     
    Haiku real estate:
    Two room luxury unit
    With Eat In Kitchen.

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    tanka haiku:

    Dreams of our demise
    build a second home out back
    from cubes of smooth ice.

         Echoes are dampened inside
         when the furniture arrives.


    moat


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    I think about this
    All the time, to my regret
    I think about this

    Loves lost and loves won
    I won one love and I lost
    But time tells us all

    Nothing really lasts
    Nothing is this permanent
    So I must adjust

    --

    I have memories
    Memories that just keep on
    And still are keeping


    Richard Day

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    tanka haiku:

    Dancing skeletons;
    Words skittering in the pan
    with sly tiny nods

         argue against the old judge
         and his gavel of regret.


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    I miss nursing my
    espresso. How best to press?
    Good Coffee not there
     
    It is espresso
    and not expresso. Haha
    Magic in caffeine

    Oooooooooooooh, the initial
    Initial taste on the tongue
    Espresso just rules

    There is a whole foods
    Store down the street I might pass
    From time to time tho

    When snow melts and I
    Rethink my real existence
    I may revisit

    There is something true
    About a real espresso
    Just so you might know


    Richard Day

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    Clouds of tourists clump
    over wet streets in Times Square;
    The neon drizzles.
     
    These years in orbit
    around my only planet
    make for a full moon.

    Dog chases the stick,
    Returning it to be thrown;
    A language game.

    moat

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    The doors do not close.
    Tags on the knobs disturb you.
    Breathe the hotel air.

    Spring wraps its scarf tight,
    waiting in the longer day:
    A quiet bus stop.

    --

    The stop has one friend
    to help cast moving shadows;
    Sundials in transit.

     

    moat

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    It was almost gone.
    We dance to the nick of time;
    Needing the sharp edge.

    moat


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    The lesson again:
    As if this strange thing was learned
    by repetition.

    The hard things are soft.
    Some things outside heard sharply:
    A quiet appeal.
     
    The self as a thing.
    We don't know about that life.
    We talk about it.


    --

    I work tomorrow.
    Stealing time from a question;
    Running from something.


    moat


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    She walked on her toes.
    Cadence to an odd new song;
    Impossible dance.

    moat


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    The shape of her feet
    seen from every angle.
    I am not done yet.

     

    Reluctant winter
    hides behind spring's festival.
    Bird song shadow box.

    moat

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    He left what was done
    to see if it would return:
    Testing the system.

    Cutting to a line;
    close without erasing it
    is the skill itself.

    moat

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    His strong emotion;
    hidden by bold nonchalance:
    Walks upon a beam.

     Flower is an end.
    Tightly coiled bud opens up;
    Letting something go.

    moat

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    Whatever the scene,
    nobody likes to get played:
    Manipulation.

    Fingers on the scale;
    Watching as the deal goes down;
    People at the door.
     
    The heart is stupid:
    Finding all coordinates
    through itself alone.

    moat

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    I do not feel that
    God is watching, but I feel
    Nothingness awaits.

    Mortality's sure
    Even Dick Cheney will die
    Death awaits us all

    Voltaire had gardens
    He hid in those many groves
    to ignore evils
     
    I watch PGA
    I miss Tiger Woods but now
    I watch a German

    I have nothing to
    Add, but I had a little of
    Bliss at one short time
     
    Counting is so hard
    Syllabiles are not easy
    That is all I got?

    What the hell were we
    Talking about before I
    began my ranting?


    Richard Day

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    What seems most given;
    the experience of time;
    is least understood.

    Disappointed look:
    Envelope and its letter;
    The glove and the slap.

    moat

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    Neon boils over.
    Forty Second Street is blue.
    Feet stamp down the past.

    moat

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    Turn red with anger,
    white at the sight of a ghost.
    Blue remembers blue.
     
    We met in hard times.
    When a pattern gets started,
    the rest is like it.

    moat

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    My mind is slipping
    on the icy road of tears
    where your children walk.

    My mind is slipping
    as my soul is falling through
    the abyss of yours.


    barefooted

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    Do we need the flame?
    Or is it enough to bask
    in the afterglow?

    The wax that has dripped
    down the sides of memory
    still carries some warmth.

    So let us slumber
    in the generosity
    of its peaceful light.

    barefooted


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    tanka haiku:

    Thoughts repeat themselves.
    That is neither good nor bad,
    seen as a process.

    Hegel played Psychology
    while Spinoza looked for God.

    moat

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    Too bad his record
    belied the liberal heart
    he wore on his sleeve.

    barefooted

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    Loveliness, to me,
    is a gentle dignity.
    Loveliness was she.

    barefooted


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    Loneliness to me
    Is lack of some dignity
    Loneliness is me

    Richard Day

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    The white birds are back
    It is less than mid august
    A winter awaits

    Hard winter is near
    These birds know the real future
    Cause they always know
     
    How do they know this?
    Because of experience
    I know cold is nigh

    Are these just omens?
    Yeah, but I trust these omens
    They were here before

    We must prepare for
    The real cold that awaits us
    Or we all shall freeze

    Richard Day

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    As the flower died
    Between forgotten pages
    The fragrance lingered.
     
    barefooted

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    I recognize you.
    My eyes do not see, and yet ...
    You are everywhere.

    I envelope you.
    My blindness assuaged because ...
    You recognize me.

    barefooted

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    Turn the volume up!
    For sightless hearts are dancing
    on the FM dial.

    barefooted

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    My juvenile mind
    tortures the tendons with dance:
    Geriatric Rock.

    moat

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    It's mortality
    That is what's bothering me
    Mortality, see?
     
    I'm going to die
    At least, sooner or later.
    Sooner or later

    What does sooner mean?
    What does later really mean?
    Later becomes now

    Later becomes now
    Eventually it comes
    Later becomes now
     
    Why is it so hard
    To accept the fate of all?
    And I am just one?

    Seven billion
    And so I am just the one
    This is selfishness

    Enough of that stuff
    We had a cool summer
    No need for coolers
     
    Devises that cool
    were needed elsewhere
    Far from this northland

    I listen to the loons
    I listen to the wind and trains
    Calming they all are


    Richard Day

     

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    With down like ducklings
    pillowed clouds floated softly,
    disguising the swans.

    barefooted

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    On her tippie-toes
    the ballerina surprised
    the prima donna.

    And in so doing,
    caused the soprano to sound
    much like a chicken!

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    It leans to the right,
    the needles are falling off,
    half the lights don't work

    The star is crooked,
    and the garland is drooping.
    What a lovely tree!!

    barefooted

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    Wrapped in silent night,
    I danced with a new partner.
    He showed me my feet.

    I am closer now.
    Though I don't know how I know.
    The path draws my step.

    Day is my Sister.
    We breakfast on rising light
    then rush off to work.


    moat

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    Black eye peas give luck.
    Apple cobbler provides warmth.
    Where are my new socks?


    moat

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    Context's not content.
    These words right here are content.
    The haiku---context.
     
    When content is writ,
    As the here and now of it.
    Context is content.

     
    Oxy Mora

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    The hoar frost is here
    Besides the fog and sticky snow
    Everything white
    The bushes dance with white
    In the wind, bushes dance white
    Everything white
    This white seems so clean
    All the dirt is covered up
    But danger is there
    Fall down and You're done
    Yet the snow helps us
    Snow is so less slippery
    Yet the white is like
    Baptism and forgiveness
    A new world begins

    Richard Day

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    Gremlins ate some lines,
    dag is infected with gremlins
    catch them if you can?


    trkingmomoe

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    Now my soul is free ...
    No more tears to find all the
    pain I'd left behind.

    No fear, no despair,
    no confusion anywhere ...
    Now my soul is free.

    barefooted

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    yearbook hits dumpster
    old photo of arranged date
    we both looked away.

    dumpsters make a noise
    clang, at least they say something,
    what were your hobbies?

    When did you marry?
    Did you have any children?
    That's it then, throw it.

     
    Oxy Mora

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    A simple Haiku
    without its complexity
    is not a Haiku.

    barefooted


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    A French quotation:
    Let them eat longevity.
    Hungry old peasants.

    It's just an abyss,
    So go jump off a high cliff.
    Folks should lighten up.

    So, she's your ex wife?
    Those cold damn peas and onions.
    Awkward holidays.

    Oxy Mora

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    REMEMBRANCES OF THINGS PAST

    He sat on the bridge
    Between the East & West Banks
    Across the river
    Across the river
    He spied the place of his birth
    Just twenty three years

    Just twenty three years
    And I had traveled two miles
    Just two miles thus far
    But I had no record
    No mistakes on paper yet
    Plenty mistakes tho
    I almost jumped in
    I felt a baptism might help
    To be free of sin
    Two degrees, so what?
    I felt so goddamn lost and
    My paper trail clean
    I just recall the sun
    Shining up on that river
    As I wept for me
    Selfishness is there
    Selfishness causes despair
    I was very lost
    I just recall this
    Like it was yesterday
    I am still so lost
    After all these years.

     

    the end


    Richard Day

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    Fear waits for bad things.
    Courage has no time for that.
    There is work to do.

    moat

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    A doorman locked out
    is the ultimate snobby
    cold layoff notice.

    Oxy Mora


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    He's waited all year.
    Winter coats are like old friends.
    Now the ear muffs, eh.

    Oxy Mora


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    Sorry, this content
    is not available in
    your location, doc!

    Verified Atheist


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    The hunt over, an
    8-Pointer splayed on a Jeep!
    Oh the joy, the pain.

    Oxy Mora

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    Old Circus tent rule.
    Always place the pop corn stand
    Upwind of patrons.

    Upwind from a bear.
    Too bad he didn't know it.
    No pop corn for lunch.

    Oxy Mora

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    Treat the infection
    with rhetorical questions.
    Poultice wound with rage.

    Energetic steps,
    leaning into the cold rain,
    compress fallen leaves.

    Spattered by faint praise,
    he beat his chest like Tarzan.
    Jane kept on reading.


    moat


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    Ice cream quart melting.
    He spooned around the edges,
    offending his wife.
     
    Double murder charge.
    "Yo, I never killed no one"
    Language can hurt you.

    The netflix couple.
    He jumped up to get a beer.
    She quietly streamed.

    Texting ? four u:
    Wht dus th wrd banal meen?
    Ans: dmb thgs peep rite.
     
    A face lift only works
    when life is on the upswing.
    per Isaac Newton.
     
    October tin roofs
    brace for rain, hail, dead branches,
    pinging of acorns.

    leaves let loose their grip,
    glide with dignity onto
    beds of winter grass.

     
    Oxy Mora

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    Red state religion;
    Matt, Mark, Luke and Wyat Earp;
    Guns and Jesus---Christ!

    Creation theme park.
    God made little green apples;
    Feed the dinosaurs.

    Liquidity, blah,
    Bonds, blub, stocks, blap, hedge

    funds, blip;
    Dirt's dirt cheap right now.

    Grand Canyon, Mesa,
    Apache Junction, Scottsdale,
    Patagonia?

    Dessert forks languished.
    It's unimaginable!
    Left-over cobbler.

    Doors should be opened,
    Especially for pizza.
    Super---not supper.
     
    Troves of poison oak,
    Grandpa died a pedophile;
    tombstones can hurt you.

    Love should conquer all.
    Except--- Don't side-swipe my car,
    you jerk--- where was I....

     

     Oxy Mora

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    Gangster Kitties don't
    play with little mousey toys
    when someone's watching

    Verified Atheist


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    Fluorescent shadows
    play pep talk in the blue room.
    Time cards hide in slots.

    GPS guru
    croons didactic urgency;
    The exit is near.

    His stare unnerved me.
    Scarecrow smiles after spotting
    my easy panic.

    moat

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    Perhaps the lender
    Would refinance the old loan.
    Hello! Is Faust in?

    Oxy Mora


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    Mephistopheles
    brings fresh blood to the old game:
    Personal Banking.

    moat

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    We're Brimstone Bank, When
    your assets have gone to Hell,
    we have a branch there....


    MrSmith1

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    Leaves let loose their grip,
    glide with dignity onto
    beds of winter grass.

    Oxy Mora


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    He subtracted her.
    Coldly, methodically, he
    sliced the equation.

    barefooted


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    Coefficient hearts
    treat variable factors
    as a finite set.

     moat


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    Muscles intertwined,
    afraid of suffocation
    they refuse to breathe.

    barefooted

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    This scientist's eyes
    read what you wrote and his brain
    said to laugh out loud

    Verified Atheist

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    Shift-Enter inserts
    New line without extra space
    In case you wondered

    Verified Atheist


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    The rocket blew up.
    I didn't know as I gazed
    at an empty sky.

    The night before that,
    my view was obstructed by
    an errant sailboat.

    barefooted

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    Fear, like a balloon,
    slowly becomes inflated
    by those who can't breathe.

    Inevitably,
    it will burst into pieces ...
    Resuscitation.

    barefooted


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    The canary died.
    It is time to leave the mine.
    Knowledge can hurt you.

    moat


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    He pushed on the door,
    and stepped back twice when he saw
    the other people.

    moat

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    Close enough to stare,
    but too far away to hear
    their explanation.

    barefooted


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    Delicate green stem,
    bearing broad leaves in the rain,
    dips and turns with ease.

    Grasp sparrow's tail:
    If I could really do it,
    would I have the bird?

    moat

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    tanka haiku:

    Plot, hatched by a Loon
    introduces the Falcon:
    A Murder of Crows.

    Cormorant finds it fishy;
    A scene on the beach occurs.

    moat


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    I am on the phone
    Pop, it's me, how's it goin?
    Oh my back and my....

    Oh stop that, I think
    I AM JUST FINE, HOW ARE YOU?
    Oh Pop it seems bad.

    Well how is baby?
    She cries and mama's sooooo tired
    And nobody sleeps

    Precious got sick
    And now I am sick; stuffed up
    I got a week off

    And I clean the house
    And I try to get some sleep

    Work is easier.
    Noela toss those
    Those berries are poison, just
    Toss them on the ground

    Oh Pop this is tough
    Mom and Grandma took baby
    To the doc today

    For a reg check up
    I am in the yard with her
    SHE JUST PISSED HERSELF!

    Surrounded by fems
    His babies, Mom, & grandmas
    No men to talk to.

    Hahahahahahahahahahhahah
     
    Life can be so goooooooooooood
    But it can be a tough job
    He must just man up

    hahahahhah

    And he will manage
    He yells at his girl, and he
    Sounds just like I did.

    He sounds just like me
    It is amazing
    To go back in time like this
    And yet hear myself
    He had to go and
    Care for his wet baby girl
    And I said good bye!

    Echoes of remembrances of things past.

     
    Richard Day


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    Long dress rehearsal;
    not sure that I fit the role;
    The curtain rises.

     moat


    ---


    My trousers are gone.
    Stripped away like paint from wood.
    This is a dream: No?


    moat


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    Bonus material:  This week is Act 1 Scene 1 from the very first play I ever attempted; a play that was never produced.  It is about Radio comedian Fred Allen, who died in 1956.  He was, along with Jack Benny, one of the biggest stars in Radio, his show ran 17 years, 1932 to 1949, but because, unlike Benny, he didn't make a successful transition to television, Fred Allen has been mostly forgotten. I discovered him around 1965 when I read a book of his letters.  He was one of the first authors that I read that made me laugh out loud.  Over the years, I seemed to keep finding little reminders of Fred; while working as a page at NBC, I was assigned to clean out a closet, and found the script for his Today Show obituary, and rescued it from being thrown in the dumpster.  A friend who knew I was a fan found a discarded first edition of one of the books he wrote while walking down the street.  This friend would, a few years later star in a play which WAS authorized by Fred's estate, playing the role of Fred's wife, Portland Hoffa.  (I still don't think the play was as good as the one I wrote all those years ago. But that's Show Biz, isn't it? hahaha)   This friend also hooked me up with a couple of women from the BBC in the late 1990's who were doing a radio series on women in old time radio and they came and interviewed me about Fred's wife.  It was nice to know that all the research I had done did find an outlet eventually.  Anyway ...

    On a Treadmill to Oblivion
    by Michael Tracy Smith

    Act One - Scene One

    (The curtain is up as the audience enters.  The stage is bare and lit with a few pinspots. Upstage Left is a large, gaping black hole.  Rock music is playing.  As the house lights dim, the music is interrupted by static as if a radio dial was being turned, we hear a snippet from the song, Video Killed the Radio Star, then more static, then a snippet of A Day in The Life, more static, a few bars of "Blue Suede Shoes", static, then a snippet of a Glenn Miller song ... and then: a trio of female voices singing Fred's opening: "Mr. Allen, Mr. Allen ..." After a moment's hesitation, out of the gaping hole walks Fred Allen.  He crosses to a microphone which has risen from the floor at Centerstage.)

    Fred: (To Audience:)
    Warming up an audience is like warming up dry ice ... when you've done it, what have you got?  It is said that Life is but a few moments on a stage, illuminated by light, followed by the darkness of eternity.  An interesting notion.  But then, why is it that some people seem to escape the darkness, while most of us do not? We do our jobs, we live our lives, then we die and are forgotten.  Slowly perhaps, but gradually, as those who knew us grow old and die, we are forgotten.  What makes those that escape the darkness different?  Does everyone who is remembered, deserve to be remembered? And are those forgotten best left so? Or is fate crueler and more arbitrary than that?  For those of you that got caught in the crowd and swept in here, I would like to say that this is the Fred Allen Show.  If, by any chance, any of you are in the wrong place, you still have a few minutes before we begin to get the heck out of here.  Heck, incidentally is a place invented by the National Broadcasting Company.  NBC does not recognize Hell or the Columbia Broadcasting System.  When a bad person working for NBC dies, he goes to heck.  When a good person dies, he goes to the Rainbow Room ... Well, I can see from the script that has issued forth from my typewriter, that tonight, the Mighty Allen Art Players will perform for you a stirring little homily on the rise and fall of a radio comedian.  The age old story of a man who discovers that fame is as fleeting as a butterfly's belch, and that too often, all a comedian has to show for his years of work and aggravation is the echo of forgotten laughter.  Y'see, I was a star for over 25 years, beginning in Vaudeville and then on Broadway and on the Radio, and yet I venture to guess that not one typical average American under the age of 40 would know me from Methusalah.   Well, I hope to change all that with this modest little retrospective.  The story of one man's attempt to amuse the masses, while dodging the slings and arrow of addle-brained executives; men with minds so small, they can be stuffed into a flea's navel and still have room for six caraway seeds and an agent's heart.

    The Stage Manager appears Stage right and loudly clears his throat.)

    Stage Manager:
    Uh, Mr Allen ...

    Fred Allen:
    Ladies and Gentlemen, this is our Stage Manager.  Don't applaud, he is a relative of the Producer.  In theater today, the only thing most producers produce is relatives.

    Stage Manager:

    Mr. Allen ... We need to get things started.

    Fred Allen:

    This man's main job is to worry about when we can get everybody out of the theater and turn the lights off.  This will save his uncle thousands of dollars in electric bills and overtime payments.

    Stage Manager:

    Mr. Allen ...

    Fred Allen:

    Ohhh, why don't you just go away?  (Stage Manager exits)  I was bothered by these types all my life ... So-called 'authority figures' ... meddlers, fools, censors, editors, sponsors, vice-presidents ... Executives! You know what most executives are, don't you? They're molehill men.  They come into their offices at 9 o'clock and find a molehill on their desk. They have until 5 o'clock to make it into a mountain.  Suffice it to say, these authority figures helped make me what I am today; naught but a fading thought in the minds of the elderly generation ... So now, Ladies and Gentlemen, we present much ado about me; Fred Allen, on a treadmill to oblivion.
    The story of John Florence Sullivan, born May 31, 1894, who, as Fred Allen, became the funniest man in America ... for a while.  Owing to my familiarity with the subject, I will play the leading role.   I hope you enjoy it.  You see, I know what's coming and that sort of spoils it for me ... But, let's begin.  Now most stories like this start with some kind of fanfare.

    (A fanfare is played.)

    Well, why should we be any different?  Actually, my story begins rather quietly.  My father was a bookbinder for the Boston Public Library.  My mother died when I was three and I was raised by my Aunt Lizzie.  She did a good job.  I am five feet eleven.  People who do not raise  their children end up with midgets.  As a young man, I too worked in the library.  In my spare time, I taught myself how to juggle.  Of course, I told all my friends at the time that I started tossing in my sleep and I woke up a juggler ... (aside to audience) Don't worry, the jokes get better as we go along ... Whatever possessed me to want to juggle I will never know.

    (Three balls are tossed to Fred and he begins to juggle.)

    At a talent show for library employees, my juggling act was a big hit.  It was then that I heard a voice which changed my life:

    Young girl's voice:
    You ought to be in Show Business!

    Fred Allen:

    If that girl had kept her mouth shut, I might have ended up as the only librarian that could juggle four Balzacs at one time.  I spent all my free time rehearsing my juggling and eventually the voice of that girl sprouted in my subconscious.  I began to suspect that she was right.  There was only one way to find out.  I started appearing at amateur nights in theaters around Boston.  Aunt Lizzie always had some encouraging words for me:

    Aunt Lizzie:
    It's the road to ruin.  A boy I knew in school went on the stage and right away he turned to drink and eventually was buried in a drunkard's grave.

    Fred Allen:
    This is what Aunt Lizzie felt I could look forward to.  But, to me at the time, the thrill of performing and the excitement of meeting new people was intoxication enough.

     

    (End of Scene One.) 

    (To be continued ... )

     

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    Sorry for the double posting  Please save this one and delete the other one. Thanks.


    I guess the gremlins are still up to mischief.   


    The far right column is sometimes missing tonight here at dag for me.  That is the first time I have seen that little bug.  


    Fleeting as a butterfly's belch - marvelous!

    Is moth flatulence

    just a poor man's version of

    a butterfly's belch?


    Don't start. A moth fart

    though it comes out in the end

    Is made from whole cloth.


    Smith, thank you for your talent, dedication and creative effort.  

     

    The curtain goes up

    Take this scene and wring it dry.

    Life's a one act play.


    Who was it that said,

    There are no second acts ... he

    hates intermissions.

     


    I missed this, but we never miss because Dagblog continues.

    Me and Moat and Missy and Oxy and Atheist and even Momoe shows up!...

    THIS IS GREAT

    It makes me feel a part of something.

    I always forget what I write.

    THIS IS GREAT!

    All my friends as well as me in the same place?

    I cannot haiku right now.

    This blog makes me feeeeeel great!

    Oh and thank you for lending us your plays.

    the end


    Thank you, DD.  That means a lot.


    I like the way you arranged them into conversations. The inclusion of your play gives me the idea that the collection could be a performance piece.

    We would need to develop some 'establishment' haikus to create context (or is that content) and work out the blocking. Maybe flowerchild would let us use her mud room for the set.

    Since I thought of it, I figure I should be allowed to play the Richard part.

    It is snowing now.
    Time to go work on my laugh
    and hang the laundry.


    You know I like you moat.

    hhaahaah

    I really have to tell you this!


    I thought of adding the haikus that I wrote that everyone was commenting on, but I just liked the idea of it being all about the comments.  I don't know if I'm okay with you playing the Richard part, I was hoping to audition for that as well ... on second thought, you take it, I don't want to have to go to the frozen wilderness to research the part.  :-)
     

    Look out the window,
    there are snowflakes coming down.
    What is THAT about?

     

     

     


    That's a fascinating concept, moat. It's a longer, more complex riff on what Mr. Smith does each time he replies with a haiku in-kind. If multiple people continued an origional thought with their own, sparked by the first but expanding the idea, it could wind up reading as a collective stream of consciousness.


    Collaborative stories make me think of this;

    http://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Naked_Came_the_Stranger

    Although ... around 2000, I tried it with my Spondyville group. We wrote a story entitled"Stiffy2K" with every volunteer writing one chapter of the story. I wrote the first and last chapters and edited for continuity.  It's pretty silly, but was great fun.

    Here's a link:

    http://spondyville.com/page25stiffy2k.html


    I didn't want to post this on Doc Cleveland's blog ...

    Shakespeare authorship
    has become a series on
    History Channel.
    Did Aliens give plays to
    Oak Island's Francis Bacon?
     

     


     


    ET, write Hamlet.


    Exactly, moat!  hahaha


    Haiku on the Authorship Question:

     

    Are we still really

    Talking about this bullshit?

    Please, please get a life.


    Then it is settled.
    E,T, wrote Hamlet, helped by
    Beaumont (sans Fletcher.)
       Beaumont was a Klingon, and
       Fletcher was a Ferengi.
     


     


    I can't see the flaw in this logic.


    Well, that was a hoot! The fun you all had is evident, and contagious. I can honestly say I've never read anything quite like it! How in the world you managed to keep continuity throughout I'll never know, but you did a masterful job. There's an Alice In Wonderland feel to it - and not just because of Wiggley!


    Thanks. I always loved the idea of incorporating Uncle Wiggly into the story.  I couldn't think of any other childhood characters that have a disability ... especially an arthritic condition.


    Thanks.


    barefooted, I was imagining a kind of an American inversion of King Lear where the divided land is traversed by different characters who were not inclined to wait for Godot.


    The mud room would be more than happy to be used as the set! It's been waiting for this break into show biz for all it's life!


    Now comes the challenge of the room maintaining its authentic character while bedazzled by the looming limelight.


    Not to worry. I shall be at the ready with a very sharp antique hat pin to deflate its ego should the need arise!


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